Hi all you good people out there...
First i would like to say what a nice site this is...
I was wondering if anybody could give me any ideas on my add.i havent done a add before and would like to get some feedback as to if it ok or just pure crap..
i wont be offended at by your comments
ste...22581
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hi im new here
Quote by Mark
Hiya swinger
I'll try to give a small hand, oo er etc.
Thanx for reading my i said im married and im looking for a nice sexy female of couple for no strings fun in daytime or not into pain watersports just good erotic clean long lasting fun and friendship .I love to give plenty oral and im a good stayer and repeater but most of all i respect who im with and im clean and fun to be with..all mails will be answerd with a pic..
ste xx
Badd speling is one thing you could look at. I know we can all read the above and understand what you mean, but it might come across a little more considered if you have taken the time to get the spelling sorted - along with the punctuation.
Thanx = Thanks (unless you were trying to be cool)
add = ad. or advert
At least one space (although I prefer two) after a full stop.
im = I'm
fun in daytime = fun in the daytime
friendship .I love = friendship. I love
plenty oral = plenty of oral
repeater but = repeater, but (although the construction is not ideal to start with)
answerd = answered
There are things others may spot that I have missed with my cursory inspection, but you get the point.
I am not for one moment setting myself up as some Grammar or Spelling Queen, as that would only leave me open to people constantly picking up on my mistakes - and I'm sure there are plenty! But (tch tch never start a sentance with...) you really have made a fair old number there, and since it's the only thing (apart from your pics) that you are using to advertise yourself, you really ought to spend some time honing it.
... and finally, you've chosen to be in anon mode (which is fine of course) but then you choose to give a reply address in the text of your ad which is different to that you signed up with! I'm even thinking of making this a 'no no'. The whole point of the new verification system is to make sure that the emails that are being used in the system are:-
1) working!
2) your own!
Can I say that about the email address you give out in your ad? No. Can I say it about the one you hide? Yes.
Suggestions:-
1) tidy your ad up.
2) create an account with your email address and use that instead.
You said you wouldn't be offended, and I sincerely hope you're not, because I am only saying what I have to help you a little.
Good luck!
Mark
We may be wrong but we thought that there was no coma before but.
Quote by Mark
We may be wrong but we thought that there was no coma before but.
I'm not sure how helpful your post is, and you mean comma surely :mrgreen:
You see, this is why none of us should be too picky because we all make mistakes - although I'm surprised you managed to do so in just one sentence that was criticising my grammar *you must do better!*
And (hehe) I think you missed the point and general thrust of my post in your rush to score 1/2 a point . To be clear, his ad was sloppy and needed shaping up, and I gave a few pointers, that's all.
Hope this helps ;)
Mark
Only half a point because I already pointed out that I was uneasy with the construction to begin with - my suggestion was only acting as a little plaster over a gaping wound
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repeater but = repeater, but (although the construction is not ideal to start with)
We think you also missed the point, we were attempting to find out if we were right not to criticise you.
When ever i build a new puter for a cutomer i allways recomend avg and historykill 2003...Also if you have any problems with your puters let me know im allways happy to help....
Found this on one of your previous replies.........
Erm, not sure what I could make of this. I am always amazed by people in general, really! I had one of those mid 70's educations, where you had classes of 30+ pupils, NO computers NO calculators NO lots of stuff they have now, yet I got by. It was an educate thyself set up. One of the things I am not brilliant at is 100% spelling, but I have tried to work it out myself, and done pretty well considering my past. I just cannot comprehend why anyone would firstly advertise they can mend or build computers yet do not obviously know about the little old spell checkers in word etc? To be quite blunt, if you are genuine, I would read the other posts and try to look at what is said. It is difficult enough to get a reply, and the only thing you have not put in your ad to guarantee zero responces are you like kiddies pictures and sending your women out to earn a few bob on the streets because it gives you a thrill? If I was you I would look to rent a shag, because it appears you have little respect, little understanding of swingers or understand the site. Wanton women will NOT be fighting over you, they will NOT pm you in droves, you will be lucky to get a reply. I think you are right to ask for advise, you need it mate. If this offends, well I feel you are like so many others who drop in, and think it is all easy going. If you are genuine then learn. I can sit and read many of these ad's, because they crease me up, really. And here are the guys who are just unlucky, and even we can read ads like yours and say, between laughing....NO WAY
Found this on one of your previous replies.........
Erm, not sure what I could make of this. I am always amazed by people in general, really! I had one of those mid 70's educations, where you had classes of 30+ pupils, NO computers NO calculators NO lots of stuff they have now, yet I got by. It was an educate thyself set up. One of the things I am not brilliant at is 100% spelling, but I have tried to work it out myself, and done pretty well considering my past. I just cannot comprehend why anyone would firstly advertise they can mend or build computers yet do not obviously know about the little old spell checkers in word etc? To be quite blunt, if you are genuine, I would read the other posts and try to look at what is said. It is difficult enough to get a reply, and the only thing you have not put in your ad to guarantee zero responces are you like kiddies pictures and sending your women out to earn a few bob on the streets because it gives you a thrill? If I was you I would look to rent a shag, because it appears you have little respect, little understanding of swingers or understand the site. Wanton women will NOT be fighting over you, they will NOT pm you in droves, you will be lucky to get a reply. I think you are right to ask for advise, you need it mate. If this offends, well I feel you are like so many others who drop in, and think it is all easy going. If you are genuine then learn. I can sit and read many of these ad's, because they crease me up, really. And here are the guys who are just unlucky, and even we can read ads like yours and say, between laughing....NO WAY
Sex God
Jags and Mark are right - there should be a comma before the "but" in that context - though I would have to re-word the whole sentense to be happy with it.
OMG the educational level on this forum is AMAZING
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OMG the educational level on this forum is AMAZING
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When ever i build a new puter for a cutomer i allways recomend avg and historykill 2003...Also if you have any problems with your puters let me know im allways happy to help....
Found this on one of your previous replies.........
Erm, not sure what I could make of this. I am always amazed by people in general, really! I had one of those mid 70's educations, where you had classes of 30+ pupils, NO computers NO calculators NO lots of stuff they have now, yet I got by. It was an educate thyself set up. One of the things I am not brilliant at is 100% spelling, but I have tried to work it out myself, and done pretty well considering my past. I just cannot comprehend why anyone would firstly advertise they can mend or build computers yet do not obviously know about the little old spell checkers in word etc? To be quite blunt, if you are genuine, I would read the other posts and try to look at what is said. It is difficult enough to get a reply, and the only thing you have not put in your ad to guarantee zero responces are you like kiddies pictures and sending your women out to earn a few bob on the streets because it gives you a thrill? If I was you I would look to rent a shag, because it appears you have little respect, little understanding of swingers or understand the site. Wanton women will NOT be fighting over you, they will NOT pm you in droves, you will be lucky to get a reply. I think you are right to ask for advise, you need it mate. If this offends, well I feel you are like so many others who drop in, and think it is all easy going. If you are genuine then learn. I can sit and read many of these ad's, because they crease me up, really. And here are the guys who are just unlucky, and even we can read ads like yours and say, between laughing....NO WAY
First..... Iv set up a new account.....
Second....Thankyou for all your replys i was not offended at all..it's helped me so much.....I said i wouldn't be offended at all and that is because i wanted you to be honest as that is the only way i work..
The only thing i find a bit rude is the above.I will tell you a few things about what i was doing in the above post...
I have been working with puter's (Computer's) for a long time and im a moderator at other site's,now i was trying to say if anyone had a problem with a machine i was willing to help all i can with whatever the problem maybe.
I am also confused with the kiddie pics comment.I also work as a computer port scanner searching for child porno and the like,now if i find it on a H/D, be sure i will if you have is then logged and sent to another source for investigation.I need'nt tell you all that but there we go.
ste 23520
PS.I know my spelling is not the best at times. The spelling checker in word? wow man iv never even used word that much like i said i build them overclock them and i have a running at 3ghz overclocked i dont need word to do that.
