Quote by piercedJon
"I met this bird . . . . . .
with a face like a turd
and a wooden leg
so I said
"hop it, shit head"
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Literacy Question
Orgasminator
Quote by dambuster
"I met this bird . . . . . .
with a face like a turd
and a wooden leg
so I said
"hop it, shit head"
You cant beat a midlander for talking like it is... unless you're a yorkshire person... they tell it like it is and then denigrate with such a perfect skill that the poor sod dont even know they are being ripped to pieces
:lol: Quote by piercedJon
You cant beat a midlander for talking like it is... unless you're a yorkshire person... they tell it like it is and then denigrate with such a perfect skill that the poor sod dont even know they are being ripped to pieces
Thjat's me well and truly flucked then - a Yorkshireman, living in N E Derbyshire :doh:
Sex God
I have read your story EnD and found it to be generally spelt correctly and with correct syntax. I also found it longwinded and without much impact. Some of the poorly written material is much more entertaining and arousing, which is why people read the stories. If you want literary read Ian McEwan - if you want erotic, read whatever 'flicks your switch', I say.
One other point is that you don't have to have a 'dripping pussy' and a 'drilling' cock to make it erotic. In my view that is low-grade mainstream.
Nice try though and literate (and before you mention it, yes I know there's no verb in that sentence)
One other point is that you don't have to have a 'dripping pussy' and a 'drilling' cock to make it erotic. In my view that is low-grade mainstream.
Nice try though and literate (and before you mention it, yes I know there's no verb in that sentence)
Sexlightened
Erm!!!
Felt sure I'd read that somewhere before. Nice try fella.
The EnD
Felt sure I'd read that somewhere before. Nice try fella.
The EnD
Sex God
Quote by iain_nw
Erm!!!
Felt sure I'd read that somewhere before. Nice try fella.
The EnD
Well spotted iain! So it's not Derek, not Eric, but Kaf.
Quote by davej
now, relax a little, say "Sorry, can I rephrase my question?" and see where we go from there.
ohhh....ohhh...can I have a go at rephrasing it . :happy: ..can I . :happy: ..can I..
clears throat
I've been reading through the stories and viewing the posts and the quality of the grammer and spelling is fuckin awfull, but I guess that just reflects the wonderfull diversity of life here because as well as the thick fuckers, I have noticed the odd bright person around. Now I welcome thick fuckers, cos we cant all be bright, lets face it, I need someone to empty my bins, but I was just wondering...
Does the literacy competancies of people replying to your adverts, have any bearing on your decisions to meet them.
how did I do...eh...eh...any better,
Works perfectly for me Dave, let me buy you a pint (soda water do ya, you tight fucker?)
Quote by Sgt Bilko
EnD
Will you read the chuffing PM I sent you 8 hours ago!!!!!!!
:taz: :taz: :taz: :taz: :taz: :taz: :taz: :taz: :taz:
Send it to me, I'll read it
Quote by Eric not Derek
By the way, who is Derek?
You don't want to know!
Aah, that'd be why I asked then.
Quote by piercedJon
As to the original premise of literacy.... I have to agree that most are very poor reguarding content "I met this bird and within one sentance I was bum fucking her the end" but some are really rather good despite spelling and grammer, and also the issue with cut and paste from word which seems to screw up the line breaks.
A good contentious post tho... and interesting to follow the debate.
But, do you agree with the aggressive manner in which it was originally phrased?
Quote by Sgt Bilko
Erm!!!
Felt sure I'd read that somewhere before. Nice try fella.
The EnD
I'm disappointed EnD!!! :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock: :shock:Ooh, what a bugger.
Do you think EnD knows how to spell plagiarist?
Quote by Eric not Derek
Is there some rule that says I can't post a story on two sites? I was asked to post a story here last night. Did you expect me to write one immediately?
A "Here's one of mine that I already posted on another site" would have helped to allay any concerns of plagiarism...
I'm wondering if you meet the over 18 criteria for this site.
sorry, I meant assuage, not allay. Easy mistake to make though, don't you think?
:? :? :?Quote by Eric not Derek
Now what about one for an abrasive start to your posting life?
Certainly not. Think of all the fun you would have missed had I not asked my original question in the manner I did!
I'm not going to say that I'm warming to you unless you can confirm that you've read the Sarges PM.
8-) 
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Now what about one for an abrasive start to your posting life?
Certainly not. Think of all the fun you would have missed had I not asked my original question in the manner I did!
I'm not going to say that I'm warming to you unless you can confirm that you've read the Sarges PM.
8-) I can confirm that he has!
:lol: :lol: :lol: :lol: .... and several others too! :thumbup:
Quote by Eric not Derek
I can confirm that he has!
.... and several others too!
And I can confirm that Sgt has read mine!
Cool!
Now what about starting a new thread called "Literacy and Swinging" and asking this question that I have carefully phrased for you...
I've been reading through the stories and viewing the posts and the quality of the grammer and spelling is fuckin awfull, but I guess that just reflects the wonderfull diversity of life here because as well as the thick fuckers, I have noticed the odd bright person around. Now I welcome thick fuckers, cos we cant all be bright, lets face it, I need someone to empty my bins, but I was just wondering...
Does the literacy competancies of people replying to your adverts, have any bearing on your decisions to meet them?
Now what about starting a new thread called "Literacy and Swinging" and asking this question that I have carefully phrased for you...
Nah. That's old news now! I think I pretty much got people's opinion on that one.
I am amazed , though, by the rush to apologise for their instant judgements in calling me a plagiarist, by the likes of detective dan up-thread.
Sex God
Quote by Eric not Derek
Now what about starting a new thread called "Literacy and Swinging" and asking this question that I have carefully phrased for you...
Nah. That's old news now! I think I pretty much got people's opinion on that one.
I am amazed , though, by the rush to apologise for their instant judgements in calling me a plagiarist, by the likes of detective dan up-thread.
P'raps he lives in another timezone and has other things to do.
Heh, fella - you going to the Guangzhou munch then?
I read your story too Eric/Derek/Kaf and after being a participant in this thread, I thought you deserved a response from me.
My view on the language used is that it was quite clinical in places and quite predictable in others. The style of the piece seemed to be that you were writing it as a man watching a sexual experience through his wife's eyes but rather than sharing any voyeuristic thrill with you it came across as quite clinical, particularly with some of the words used which I felt were more Razzle than erotic.
Repetition of some phrases stunted the flow of the story and the dialogue was also a little wooden which had the same effect. You should also have trusted that your reader would understsnd that the other couple were using aliases and not continued to refer to them as 'Mike' and 'Cindy' rather than Mike and Cindy through the entire story as I found that a distraction. You painted a picture of Amy well, but I would have liked to see a little more development of her emotional responses to the experience, again it felt like a clinical study of response rather than an erotic tale.
Having said that, erotica is difficult to pin down to a formula as everyone has different triggers that they will respond to. As someone else said, a story with poor spelling or grammar can still elicit a strong response.
It's not the worst I've read by any means but it's not a good enough read (for me) to support your self assumed position as a literary superior to others.
My view on the language used is that it was quite clinical in places and quite predictable in others. The style of the piece seemed to be that you were writing it as a man watching a sexual experience through his wife's eyes but rather than sharing any voyeuristic thrill with you it came across as quite clinical, particularly with some of the words used which I felt were more Razzle than erotic.
Repetition of some phrases stunted the flow of the story and the dialogue was also a little wooden which had the same effect. You should also have trusted that your reader would understsnd that the other couple were using aliases and not continued to refer to them as 'Mike' and 'Cindy' rather than Mike and Cindy through the entire story as I found that a distraction. You painted a picture of Amy well, but I would have liked to see a little more development of her emotional responses to the experience, again it felt like a clinical study of response rather than an erotic tale.
Having said that, erotica is difficult to pin down to a formula as everyone has different triggers that they will respond to. As someone else said, a story with poor spelling or grammar can still elicit a strong response.
It's not the worst I've read by any means but it's not a good enough read (for me) to support your self assumed position as a literary superior to others.
Thank you for your comments.
er.. that is the whole point!
It was meant to be. Because the characters were feeling awkward.
At no point did I assume any such literary superiority. There is a difference between literate and literary, you know.
seemed to be that you were writing it as a man watching a sexual experience through his wife's eyes
er.. that is the whole point!
the dialogue was also a little wooden
It was meant to be. Because the characters were feeling awkward.
it's not a good enough read (for me) to support your self assumed position as a literary superior to others.
At no point did I assume any such literary superiority. There is a difference between literate and literary, you know.
Sexlightened
Hold yer horses there EnD. My judgement, if ya wanna call it that, was based on more than one of your posts over a period of time. Firstly you said "You complain that I don't put up. Fair enough. I will. In the next 24 hours. Promise." This led me to believe you needed some time to come up with something. How easy would it have been at that point to say, here's one i wrote earlier(appropriate link here) see what you think.
Then you said "(P.S. I do know of one msitake in the story where I confuse two people and give someone the wrong name. But it is almost 1 a.m. and I need to sleep.)" All well and good if it was a new piece of work, but you've had over four years to edit out that little error.
You also said "I am amazed , though, by the rush to apologise for their instant judgements in calling me a plagiarist, by the likes of detective dan up-thread." Plagiarist isn't a word I would have used, pianist maybe, or more accurately organ player. I really don't believe you deserve an apology even if it wasn't your intention to deceive, the way it reads to me is at the very least mis-leading and to be fair, many more people deserve an apology from you in regard to your opening post on this thread.
Then you said "(P.S. I do know of one msitake in the story where I confuse two people and give someone the wrong name. But it is almost 1 a.m. and I need to sleep.)" All well and good if it was a new piece of work, but you've had over four years to edit out that little error.
You also said "I am amazed , though, by the rush to apologise for their instant judgements in calling me a plagiarist, by the likes of detective dan up-thread." Plagiarist isn't a word I would have used, pianist maybe, or more accurately organ player. I really don't believe you deserve an apology even if it wasn't your intention to deceive, the way it reads to me is at the very least mis-leading and to be fair, many more people deserve an apology from you in regard to your opening post on this thread.
Quote by Eric not Derek
Thank you for your comments.
seemed to be that you were writing it as a man watching a sexual experience through his wife's eyes
er.. that is the whole point!
Bad editing of my comment, my point is that you didn't achieve it for this reader
the dialogue was also a little wooden
It was meant to be. Because the characters were feeling awkward.
Awkward and wooden are not the same thing and only one character was experiencing difficulty in conveying their true desires, that person was Amy.
it's not a good enough read (for me) to support your self assumed position as a literary superior to others.
At no point did I assume any such literary superiority. There is a difference between literate and literary, you know.
On the point of superiority, it's there in your first post....however, I made my response to that post and have no real desire to discuss that issue further as my previous post is commenting on your written piece.
