Seeking advice Please

21 Nov 2005

Hi all mostly my posts have consisted one one or two lines of rubbish (i think it may be just the one post lol) so I appreicate none of you know me at all but would one of you kind folks please read my ad and let me know if it makes any sense at all seeing as you all have much more experience in this than myself. feel free to nit pick here or in PM's lol

. I appreciate i am yet another single male so that will count against me before i even start lol.
The ad number is #437112
Thanks in advance
P.s if this is the wrong place to post this I do apologise

21 Nov 2005

its a fine advert, but to be honest you need to put at least one pic to get people to even bother clicking on it!

21 Nov 2005

only problem I can see is you don't live in manchester biggrin

22 Nov 2005

DP, oh DP.... your ad writing skills and 'how to do a decent LMU post' knowledge are required over here!! .....

22 Nov 2005

Not too much wrong with your Ad there matey...
although personally I would tidy up the spelling a bit ( and only the Americans drop the U from humour biggrin

)
As for the Bi bit.... you should be sure you want to and not put it in hoping it improves your chances. Couples looking for a bi male will be disappointed if you decide on the night you aren't really bi.
Only other thing is you may get trawled for paysites and fake ads if you leave your email showing. Always better to have it as anonymous and to lose it from the blurb too... that way only site members can access it and it makes life easier and less timewasting for you...
Other than that a nice advert... honest and open. Hope you have a lot of fun ( you'll need it in Lincs :D)

22 Nov 2005

If you're going to put up a photo make sure it's not a rubbish cock shot.... we've had many discussions on here about them and I think the general consensus is that most of the time they won't do your ad any good at all.... quite a few people find it laughable (no, not your cock, before I start giving you a complex!) and there isn't much need to post a pic of that tbh.
Just my opinion....for what it's worth! lol

22 Nov 2005

has he got a shit cock shot then Onlyme???
I kept trying to masquerade as a man in the ads but my cock shot gave me away everytime....... sad

Oldies are the goodies ey! ;) biggrin

I best fetch me coat (tm warwick) tonight! bolt

22 Nov 2005

Quote by little gem
has he got a shit cock shot then Onlyme???
I kept trying to masquerade as a man in the ads but my cock shot gave me away everytime.......

Oldies are the goodies ey! ;)
I best fetch me coat (tm warwick) tonight!

That's a very fine cock shot indeed....if you like that kind of thing.....
I'd fetch my coat too but it's 180 miles away! :lol:

22 Nov 2005

Quote by Darkfire
DP, oh DP.... your ad writing skills and 'how to do a decent LMU post' knowledge are required over here!! .....

Ok, I'm here at last. I can't promise that anything I suggest will result in loads of positive replies, after all that largely depends on the content of your ad, and we can't help you there. As it is it's ok, but a few suggestions:
1) Your current title is good in that it describes you, but doesn't stand out and make people want to click on it and find out a bit more.
2) No pictures - this does not mean you should put up a picture of your knob, but a clothed face or body pic will give people some idea of what you look like and how you choose to dress (this can be important, eg I'm a geek and habitually wear jeans and a t-shirt, this is going to be a problem for somebody that likes their blokes in a business suit).
3) As far as content goes, you're doing better than a lot of the ads out there, but I think you might need to work on it a little bit. Try to forget what it is you're advertising for a moment and just concentrate on letting people know what you're like and how you enjoy spending time when you're not shagging. People often forget this, and end up coming across as somewhat single-minded.
4) Connected to 3), you need to organise your ad a bit, use paragraphs and don't be afraid to chop and change it a bit so that it flows. Read it back to yourself first for readability, spelling and grammar, then try to imagine yourself as the male half of a couple and read it. Does your ad sound like somebody you'd like to spend time with? Is there anything in it that could put people off?
5) I agree with Postie about removing your email address from ad text and using the anonymous email function - as a single bloke you're a top target for scams and it's a lot harder for them if they have to be a logged in member to contact you. You can't stop them entirely, but I've been careful with my email address and they're only an occasional problem for me.
6) One way to get more people to read it is to put a link to it in your forum signature and then make some thoughtful and relevant posts in the cafe. Get yourself known a little (we're nice to newbies, honest wink

).
There's probably a lot more I could say, but that should be plenty of food for thought. If you do re-work it post a reply in this thread and I'm sure on or two of us could be persuaded to comment on it once more.

28 Nov 2005

Thanks for the helpfull replies, borrowing a cam soon so will have pics up shortly that will hopefully help things along smile